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 tommy_san tommy_san February 26, 2013 February 26, 2013 at 3:56:25 PM UTC link Permalink

"走り去った" sounds a little odd. It puts too much emphasis on the action of running. A more appropriate 和語 would be "逃げ去った". You could also use a 漢語 and say "逃亡した".
There's no reason to write "見る" in hiragana. It should be written in kanji. The phrase "～や否や" sounds a bit elevated, so it might be better to use a 漢語 with it.
So here's one of my suggestions: http://tatoeba.org/eng/sentences/show/2261629

You could also say without "～や否や". This time I'll use "警察官" without abbreviation ("警察官", "警察" and "警官" are all quite natural) and use the verb "逃げ去る", thus: http://tatoeba.org/eng/sentences/show/2261630

marcelostockle marcelostockle February 26, 2013 February 26, 2013 at 4:07:47 PM UTC link Permalink

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➜ #295733As soon as he saw the policeman, he ran away.

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彼は警官をみるや否や走り去った。

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