投稿された例文は、既に存在するため追加されませんでした。
very graphic sentence :)
let it at least be correct... しょんべん＝＞しょうべん（しょうべん）
朝たち「は」？
I strongly disagree with the changes to the Japanese in this sentence.
See
http://www.hana.jp/hana/ikata/K...nfldr/Pis.html
back to what it was
This particular usage of "ya" is very common in haiku, especially in the first line. I'm sure it's right.
I think the translations must be unlinked. かな expresses an exclamation (詠嘆) in literary Japanese. It's never a question.
